Peer Critique
P7 Miranda
1. the sources were her grandma and mom.
2. The story was about her grandmother. She was raised in Mexico as a child and had a lot of responsibilities and was hardworking. She came to the US illegally.
3. There are 17 paragraphs in the story.
4. There are 890 words in the story.
5. There are 8 direct quotes in the story.
6. 2 different people are quoted in the story.
7. The quote that was the most impactful was: "Life for me as a teenager was much different than yours is now Miranda.The washing machine was the creek close to the ranch, and the dryer would be the sun and some big flat rocks. I had to tend to the animals every day and make sure the house was tidy."
8. The quote is located at the beginning of paragraph 9. (middle)
9. Reading the lede, for me, was kind of like reading a huge run-on sentence. Punctuation and better word choice would have made the lede better, but aside from that I did want to know more after reading it.
10. An aunt or uncle could have been an extra person to be interviewed.
11. The story is not objective because many quotes are opinions.
12. Unanswered questions I have are when did her grandma move to the US, and did she ever pursue her nurse dream?
13. A headline to go with this story would be "
14. My opinion on the story is that it could've been much longer and the quotes could've been spread out more.
15. 80
1. the sources were her grandma and mom.
2. The story was about her grandmother. She was raised in Mexico as a child and had a lot of responsibilities and was hardworking. She came to the US illegally.
3. There are 17 paragraphs in the story.
4. There are 890 words in the story.
5. There are 8 direct quotes in the story.
6. 2 different people are quoted in the story.
7. The quote that was the most impactful was: "Life for me as a teenager was much different than yours is now Miranda.The washing machine was the creek close to the ranch, and the dryer would be the sun and some big flat rocks. I had to tend to the animals every day and make sure the house was tidy."
8. The quote is located at the beginning of paragraph 9. (middle)
9. Reading the lede, for me, was kind of like reading a huge run-on sentence. Punctuation and better word choice would have made the lede better, but aside from that I did want to know more after reading it.
10. An aunt or uncle could have been an extra person to be interviewed.
11. The story is not objective because many quotes are opinions.
12. Unanswered questions I have are when did her grandma move to the US, and did she ever pursue her nurse dream?
13. A headline to go with this story would be "
14. My opinion on the story is that it could've been much longer and the quotes could've been spread out more.
15. 80
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